Please read my story...we added and edited...please be honest...suggestions are welcome...easy 10 pts.?

Well I was actually interested and I could picture it in my head as I was reading, which I can only do with a good book, so good job If you wrote it. The wording was off in places and I had to read the sentence over to understand it. It puts me in mind of Boondock Saints sort of with the brothers. That could be good.