The Jazz writings, cont. Written under Basie's guardian gaze--thoughts?

The first part was great; you painted a very peaceful picture. I did, however, get a little confused with the immediate following of "the worn wooden bench." I liked that part and the ending of the poem very much but I thought it was a little awkward coming so soon after "dreams abounding...." as it was unclear if you were still in bed or dreaming. Lastly, as another user mentioned, a few punctuation errors but nothing major. I liked this poem, Jack. Good work :)